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Wednesday 7 March 2018

Taking flight

WALT: Plan and write a recount based on “taking flight” animation.


I will be successful when I have:
  • Planned my ideas to help me organise my writing.
  • Structured my writing with
- orientation (who, what, where, when, why, how)
- sequenced ideas
- conclusion
  • Written in first person.
  • Given interesting detail
  • Written a closing statement to sum up all my ideas

Hope you enjoy my story


Hello my name is Tony and I am 9 years old and I have to go to my uncle’s house. Firstly my dad takes me in the car, and dropped me off at my uncle’s house with things I need. I was really sad:(. “Do you still like me” I thought “You can stay here for the day, and when I come back we can have some fun:)” said dad, “You said that yesterday” I replied. He looked like he had something important to do. I wonder where he was going? Then my uncle said “Come and sit up here as I start mowing the lawn” He put me on a box and it was boring. I lay down on the box and then with my teddy bear., I saw something on the shelf, “Is that my dad?]” I thought to myself. I tried to grab it, I stood on boxes and items to get up there. “Almost there” I thought as I was reaching for it. Then I grabbed it, something rolled out in front of my uncle. As soon as he saw it, he came in and saw me with, boxes on the ground and a photo in my hand. “Your dad owned that wagon” my uncle said to me. “Let’s take it for a spin shall we” “Ok’’ I said (softly). So I got in it and my dad grabbed it, “ All hands and feet in the wagon at all times” After that he started telling me this story about some bad monkeys. Then somehow we ended up in a… Forest. “How did we get here so fast?” I thought to myself, then there were monkeys, monkeys with red eyes, they were creeping me out. I gasped as there eyes stared at me. Then my uncle speeded up the wagon and we went fast. Then our plane transformed into a boat and we went down the stream.”This is awesome” I thought to myself. But (dun, dun, dun) we were heading towards a waterfall we went straight down it. My teddy bear was in my hand and he stared moving, then our boat transformed into a plane and we flew around. “This is not as bad as the aliens”  My uncle said. So in conclusion we had a fun day together.

1 comment:

  1. Good story Chace I like the way you retold the story in your own words of a video you watched.
    Well done 👍🏼

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